Snowed In

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  • GeniusMan
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Ummm... It's a metaphor... for snow... I just kind of vomitted it out, because I felt like this snow day deserved a deep poem. I apologize if it makes no sense...

Snowed In

You're heart is like a Snow Day,
An avalanche of guilt,
You smile, you dance, you shake the hands
When it's all just a blanket of silt

A lie, an excuse, a coper
To deal with all that hurt
You laugh to show you're white as snow,
but underneath that is dirt

And what of that of friendship
The coal beats inside your chest
You're crying inside, smiling with pride,
It's obvious you're content with 'depressed.'

The snow flows over in blankets
And hardens in sheets of ice
Calling for help, below the snow shelf
A helpless weeps and cries

So burry out of whiteness,
Of joyfulness and charm,
From beauty and wit, for they don't mean (spit?)
If it's only there to cause some harm

A fraudulent face of familiarity
The sweetness of goodness and nice
So just be your self, go find some help
And actually go break the ice

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mdpoetgirl commented on Snowed In

02-15-2011

Please check out my poem Sunshine on a Winter's Day. This poem of yours reminds me of it. Would love to get your critique.

mdpoetgirl commented on Snowed In

02-15-2011

Again, cleverly written. Every one of your poems I've read so far get that same reaction from me. Cool ;-)

BlackButterfly1 commented on Snowed In

02-01-2011

This is good! I love the metaphor and the character's "fakeness." Very well done.

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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