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    I had a late night chat with someone, the chatroom was empty, the conservation was deep, and the words just started to flow. This is what came out of us. Hope you enjoy...

    Duet



    Just another string of words
    attempting to feed arousal
    and loosen the binds of reason

    Another series of movements
    and planned spontaneous
    touching of the flesh to trigger emotion

    Another path in an old direction
    leading to the same place
    with new scenery

    (She is muse to many
    yet where is her muse?)

    Always wanting more than is offered
    looking into places where eyes cannot see
    where hearts do not beat

    Walking upon stones of the past
    tasting the same old air
    when she breathes

    She is victim to the slayer of repetition
    a meal of passion's hunger
    the quench of thirst to the few that can see

    yet within...

    How can she find a heart that beats for love
    wandering the halls of dismay
    destined to play the role of happiness
    always performing on his stage

    She wonders how
    this is painful torment
    of not knowing how to love
    and having never truly loved
    came to be her play

    A lifetime of emptiness is all she knows
    is it truly what she wants
    or has she just given up
    on tomorrow and today

    What she craves most of all
    does it really exist
    outside of dreams
    or is it all a waste of time

    In the sky
    the bird is going for a walk
    and we see a majestic flight
    but we do not see
    the boredom in it's eyes

    Still she dreams of flying away
    to some foreign shore
    a place beyond the reach
    of all she knows

    yet when she looks around
    she is home

     

     

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    rsalassi commented on Duet

    07-18-2010

    I once thought a man was all a woman needed to be happy and fulfilled. Then I realized how mistaken I was. It is the woman who is needed by the man, and that's what makes it work sometimes. And then there are those, as is the picture of this woman here, who never questions who needs whom, but is satisfied with the realization that each knows without saying.

    Artie

    07/18/2010

    The thing I love most about this, is it's honesty. This was written completely on the fly in the chat room. I also agree with you on the women being needed by the man. But of course we are men, so that is the point of view we see from. Thanks for the read

    tenderpoison commented on Duet

    05-31-2010

    you nailed it...you amaze me with your ability to see things so clearly. 10

    Sydney commented on Duet

    03-02-2010

    wow. this is really good. this, i see with what lonewolf has already said. and yet it is good. Sydney

    lonewolf commented on Duet

    03-02-2010

    dead ringer. this one is off the charts. the passion, longing, desire. one incredible write. im hooked

    Maleficent commented on Duet

    02-17-2010

    it happens like that sometimes, doesn't it? very sweet write ;)

    Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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