Sonnet 001

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    Poem Commentary

    I know I know it's not a perfect sonnet but it's close i think the iambic pentameter is a little bit off and the rhymes are more near rhymes the eagle symbolizes freedom and idiosyncrasies are habits one does

    Sonnet 001

     My heart was once so innocent and pure
    Now it's full of bitterness and evil
    I thought our love was so young yet mature
    But now it's trapped, far from an eagle

    My life is now not my own, it's not free
    But iron bars make not this cage of mine
    It is all your idiosyncrasies
    I will sit in the dark and drink my wine

    Getting drunk to the point of no return
    What's the point when there is no love for me
    My lifeless eyes look towards yours for concern
    Pupils screaming out hate is all I see

    Why dont you come back and we start anew
    Your name on my arm, a bloody tattoo

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    ImStillHere commented on Sonnet 001

    04-09-2011

    Wow, i really like this one. You really bring out the pain someone feels when the one they love leaves them. And if the iambic pentameter is off, oh well :) its great either way. ~Audrey
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    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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