Unrequited Love

3 Comments

Poem Commentary

I struggled to find something to write about with this poem I felt like writing and looked everywhere for inspiration. i spent about an hour searching the internet and finally i started writing and this one just came out of thin air. Tell me what you think I am iffy on this one

Unrequited Love

I have this pain so deep inside

My heart feels ripped in two

From this pain I can not hide

Because I am so blue


I hope you feel the same

Or at least the same times three

To you this was all a game

Your the one who holds the key


Once you made me love you

And for that I wont forget

The day you said you loved me too

And called me your little pet


Lies are what you made me believe

And to this day it's true

I found out on Christmas Eve

That our love was through


I will miss you for all the yesterdays

And even for tomorrow

I hope this doesnt sound cliche

But I feel such sorrow

Poem Comments

(3)

Please login or register

You must be logged in or register a new account in order to
leave comments/feedback and rate this poem.

Login or Register

forbiddenlove commented on Unrequited Love

06-17-2009

I love it! I am so there at this point in my life. Why do we love those that bring us joy sometimes but misery most of the time?

devaamido commented on Unrequited Love

06-14-2009

I think you're right about this one Alexia. It doesn't have the gut-punch impact of your poem about your grandmother. It gives the feeling of something you read rather than something that's true for you from your own life's experience. Gd rhyming & structure though.

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

Alexia’s Poems (33)

Title Comments
Title Comments
A life 0
Thoughts 0
The life 0
One fine day in May 0
Loss 1
You're Really Not 0
Faerie Garden 0
My world 2
A World of Their Own 3
Heaven 1
My walk of solitude 3
Day Dream 1
Rain 2
Daddy's little girl 7
The Spark 2
My fairytale 3
All I want 2
Our Little Gift 1
My Dark Night 3
Forever Yearning 2
Strong and True 4
Snow Fall 3
My Prince 4
Wilted Love 2
The Dance 3
My Best Friend 5
I didn't know 2
Betrayal 6
Unrequited Love 3
Oceanic Memories 1
Two Lovers 4
Mother and Baby 1
Baby Sleeps 2