Gently now, she came to me

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    Nothing in particular, just a write of my own. First in weeks.

    Gently now, she came to me

     Ending of the lifelessness
    Beginning of our peril
    There was one
    And now there's another

    Such confusing emotions
    Darkness in its prime
    The light yet to be seen
    Filled up your empty heart

    Slash and burn
    Clash and scorn
    Memories can be forgotten
    But not both sides always do

    It becomes selective
    Forgetting the things
    You never liked
    You never wanted

    Evil one
    I've forgotten you
    But this was about someone else
    So your dark reign has ended

    Up and and down and all around
    This pain shall meander 'round my heart
    Criss cross, a throw and a toss
    Lost forever in the gloom

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    BrokenHeart2009 commented on Gently now, she came to me

    01-04-2011

    I like the use of metaphores and word play in this poem, it bounces around but still keeps and air of darkness. Intriguing.
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