Fluids

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    I don't feel good. I'm stuck at school and I don't feel good. I hate it.

    Fluids

     Struggling to breathe
    Dark dreary eyes
    Weak
    Tired
    Longing for the air
    A bed of feathers
    Hot mint tea
    Sniffle
    Sniffle
    The occasional sneeze
    I've a dry mouth
    Sickly
    Yet living
    Too close to you
    Closeness made me ill 

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    hannahxP commented on Fluids

    04-21-2011

    am i being blamed for this? lol i like it its a good description of bein sick and it has a good rhythem................................
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    chemicalcuke

    04/22/2011

    I blame you for a lot of things lol I'm not blaming you per se, just including you in a poem

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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