Twins Haiku

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Thoughts on 9 -11 and other mirages that occurred on that day.

Twins Haiku




Twins Haiku

Majesty cut short
In mangled ruins, souls flew
Mysteriously 

-M. Jacobs 

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bklynrizz commented on Twins Haiku

03-14-2010

Wow! Amazing how you captured the saddness and horror in just three lines and 17 syllables.

danmartyjake1

03/23/2010

Than ks for reading it and your comments.. I appreciate it! ;-)

knight4696 commented on Twins Haiku

03-10-2010

Marion - Great job! :) You definately conveyed the tragedy of 9/11 in so few words! :) Again, Great job! Ken

danmartyjake1

03/10/2010

thanks, I have been working on haiku lately to discover how to do them. I appreciate your response to "Twins Haiku".

kmooney commented on Twins Haiku

03-05-2010

Very well done. I like the Haiku. This one I like a lot. 9/11 left a burning scar on my soul. I often think about it. I hope nothing ever comes close to matching it in my lifetime. I've written several poems about it. If you haven't already, read Recurring Nightmare and Blue Tuesday Morn (the 95th floor). Blue Tuesday Morn is a long acrostic. See if you can find the hidden messages. It's a little creepy but worth reading I think. Thanks for the Haiku. Great job...K

danmartyjake1

03/05/2010

Interesting, I will def look for that one. I am curious anyway. Thanks for reading "Twins Haiku", we will talk soon.

alreedus commented on Twins Haiku

03-04-2010

Souls not only flew - they ran away. Haunting and enchanting. It blew me away. -Alan

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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