The Unknown

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    My current feelings.

    The Unknown

    People wonder through life,
    Blind,
    Never really mind,
    Where they're going,
    Never questioning,
    What could have been,
    Just waiting for the end,
    Not trying to sway,
    Not wishing to change,
    Just staying the same way,
    Not wishing for better,
    Just willing to let her,
    Get away,
    Never to see again some day,
    Everyone makes their own decisions,
    I just keep wishin',
    To find the right one,
    Just wishing for someone,
    To treat me right,
    I don't mean just for one night,
    I've gotten where,
    I don't really care,
    Throwing my hands up into the air,
    Never truthfully feeling love from another,
    Other than that of my mother,
    I treat people good,
    Some way better than I should,
    I have been used,
    Never really abused,
    I just wish someone,
    Would take me down,
    Cut me loose,
    Out of the noose,
    Someone to keep me happy,
    Someone to be with,
    Through thick and thin,
    All of the way to the end,
    Someone to make me whole,
    Someone to keep me warm,
    When it is cold,
    It will all come in time,
    When God feels I am ready,
    Solid and steady,
    He will let me take her,
    He knows that I will not forsake her,
    I am always willing to change,
    Willing to rearrange,
    As long as it is for the better,
    As long as it helps us,
    From the day I met her.

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    graceladymn commented on The Unknown

    09-21-2009

    Most of us wish for a special companionship that helps us see life and ourselves, that is what love is about, the gifting to each other of presence and exchange of ideas and thoughts and new ways of being and doing. Your poem has a lot of longing and is well written, speaking from your heart. I am glad to read it, thank you for sharing it.

    DarkChi commented on The Unknown

    09-16-2009

    it's sweet i enjoyed reading it, i'm not really a god fearing person. but some how it fit

    bobarobbob commented on The Unknown

    08-27-2009

    I like it. It speaks to a part of us that is wandering lost. Searching for a soul to share it all with. Thats what I got out of it anyway. :o)

    DeepEclipse commented on The Unknown

    08-27-2009

    Smooth rhymes. This poem shows that apathy that I go through constantly. Maybe I hit too many disapointments, so it dulls my nerves. The poem still shows hope though, keeping head up, if not high, then at least level. Still looking, hoping, wondering. Good write. Leaves me reflecting on my own circumstances.

    raemarie commented on The Unknown

    08-26-2009

    Just remember no matter what you put into it, if they arent willing to do the same, someone else outhere is and that makes it all the more worth waiting for. There is nothing worse than not being appreciated and being taken forgranted. So dont loosen your grip on your own self resprect, patience is a virtue my friend, it is.

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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