Dear God

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    I also wrote this in high school...

    Dear God
    Dear God,
    Oh God,
    They try to make me mad,
    I always stay glad,
    Dear God,
    I know you are busy,
    Can you please help me,
    My friends all hate me,
    Up here in Tennessee,
    Dear God,
    I know that you are there,
    Cause you can always hear,
    All of the people down here,
    Oh dear,
    Help Me!!
    Dear God!!

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    melanie23 commented on Dear God

    08-20-2009

    i like the flow. there is a bit of over use on a few phrases but that is just my opinion. all in all though it was written well
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    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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