the dark horse

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    From March Poetry Survivor Week 1. It is a poem about commanding and taking independence.

    the dark horse

    She stands timidly bar, in utter glory
    Awaiting the known fate that she is destined for
    In the vein of a foal, tremulous yet strong willed
    With vigor, she runs swift; sleek black coat in brilliance
    Unaware of her beauty she glides like an angel
    Exalted by the cool air and feeling the power of
    The brisk winds of change that surround her

    Champion genetics frequently mirrored to
    The image of her dam; Instinctively she rebels
    And begins the battle of her own revolution
    Sheer will sets her apart, she does not seek to win
    Nor does she want to lose, with new found confidence
    She achieves buoyancy, inner beauty; self-worth
    A mare of a different drum renowned for being true

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    Springsize commented on the dark horse

    03-27-2010

    I remember this adorable poem from the Island. I was in a rush, and tried to get back to vote before the deadline. I really appreciate the way this little colt was born free, seems to know that it is her heritage to move swift, there is no word for win in her language.. but she loves to make the wind happy upon her skin, her hair moving from her like feathered long-tethered wings that are attached only to those who are behind her, wanting to fly with her... whether horse friend or human, she ends the race of strength and those around her do let her know too, how special she is and how good, her run. It is a different world with animals, but similar too... very intriguing how you caught her personality. :)
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    dawnjyc

    03/29/2010

    Oh I love this comment and how you viewed this poem. Thank you so much!

    ginga commented on the dark horse

    03-26-2010

    dawn, Certainly one of the best poems that was submitted in the Poetry Survivor1 contest. I love how you the poet can narrate the horse's aura with such passion and dignity. ginga
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    dawnjyc

    03/29/2010

    Ginga...thank you. I wrote this poem after seeing a picture of a beautiful black horse. Her eyes were stunning and sort of sucked me into her soul and I felt sort of a connection with her. I don't usually get moved easily by horse pictures but the photographer captured her inner soul well.

    MindNumbing commented on the dark horse

    03-26-2010

    I loved this during the Poetry Survivor competition, Dawn... fantastic use of metaphors and imagery. 10 from me :)
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    dawnjyc

    03/29/2010

    thank you so much mindnumbing. I am an absolute fan of your poetry!

    BikemanRJ commented on the dark horse

    03-26-2010

    A very beautiful picture that you have painted of this magnificent mare. Very graphic read I could see the beautiful black coat. Good Read. God Bless BikemanRJ
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    dawnjyc

    03/29/2010

    Thank you so much for stopping by and commenting I am glad you enjoyed.

    gogant commented on the dark horse

    03-25-2010

    Hi Dawn...this is wonderful........seems like the mare wants to be freed from the reins of the rider, and to trot along as she pleases.
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    dawnjyc

    03/29/2010

    Yes...she is freed from all that she was intended for. Thank you!

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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