Not okay.

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    • alldreamz
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    Not okay.

    Not okay.


    Striken struck strike Oh goodness, oh my.. it's like lightning has striked... The world spinning at an gut wrenching rhythm. Imagination filled with ideas, a slow steady pacemaker replaced with a moment of adrenalin. Just like life to throw in a curve ball, but the decision never made will keep it all in check. Forbidden not allowed sorry .. not for sale, the space is occupied by the world of abandonment, but mine none the less and not for .... the idea the inquiry... ask just a little be just a little and I'll be just a little but not a go not for sale the idea about the inquiry... not for you not for me just a place that will always be.

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    lithiumblack commented on Not okay.

    10-05-2009

    I get it. I truly do. Your pacing and the fragmented structure of this poem, odd little deluges of words that won't make sense unless you're paying rapt attention. Fragmented like the thought of anyone going through something so emotionally unnerving. You depict an ideal here that many experience, but cannot put into words, and you do the job beautifully. An easy, effortless 10.

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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