Let the Water Take Me

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    Let the Water Take Me
    Let the world end with whispers,
    little wispy strands
    of lives lost
    and new ones begun.
     Let me fall
    into the water
    let me swim amongst the fish
    a lost soul
    finding solace in the sea.
    Let the waves wash over me
    crashing down on my back.
    Let me be free.
    Let my hair fan out behind me,
    my legs kick gracefully.
    Let the water envelope me
    let it take me.
    Let it take me in,
    I welcome it.
    Let it.
    Let it take me . 

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    karix13 commented on Let the Water Take Me

    09-27-2010

    I love this poem. It's so simple and fluent, it sounds like water itself. Have you ever heard the song "into the ocean" by blue october? It has a similar idea. This poem completely tells how I feel right now.
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    brokenhearted11

    09/28/2010

    thanks! and no, havent heard that song yet, but i'll look it up later. thanks again

    AmadeusEx commented on Let the Water Take Me

    08-31-2010

    this short but perfect piece really uplifted me...you are super talented, keep writing
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    brokenhearted11

    09/01/2010

    thank you!!! and yeah, i intend to! hahaha thanks :)

    Teardrops commented on Let the Water Take Me

    08-11-2010

    This is beautiful i see bon jova singing this he has the soft gentle voice .Thanks for the read my friend Marie
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    brokenhearted11

    08/12/2010

    your welcome :) thanks :D

    SEVEN commented on Let the Water Take Me

    08-11-2010

    I totally like this,,,,sometimes I wish the water of life wash me to the sea so I can hang 11 and to never seen standing alone on the shores of life again....Kudos on this write....U r diffinitely readin my mind. which isn't hard to do I'm told :P
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    DeeVoelkel commented on Let the Water Take Me

    08-11-2010

    This has a song type quality to it. I could almost hear someone like Anouk or Nora Jones singing it.
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    brokenhearted11

    08/11/2010

    yeah, i did think about a kinda of floaty quality to it. thanks :)

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