14 Stories Up

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READ THIS FAST. read it continued and fast and all in one breath. read it how i read it in my head and to myself, and it will sound amazing. read it like a different poem, it will sound like crap. your choice.

14 Stories Up

Standing on the very edge of a 14 story
building and the gun's sitting heavy in his
fist and a blue Pontiac is screaming past
on the street underhead and the doomed ring
of ambulances and cop cars and church bells chiming
'cause it's a Sunday, and mass has
just let out and the moment of
strung out immortality hangs suspended in the air
on a string like a brick of words hard to swallow
and it falls from a readily open mouth and
he lets go and I swear to god;
I thought he would fly.  

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sk8erpoet commented on 14 Stories Up

03-09-2011

i love this poem..its amazing... I love all the thoughts in it...great write..sk8

brokenhearted11

03/09/2011

thank you!!

angelchaser commented on 14 Stories Up

02-05-2011

Read it fast, read it slow, loved it both ways. Your descriptive nature is something to treasure, sweetpea:)

brokenhearted11

02/05/2011

haha thanks. its like... all one breath, connected, strange. but i liked it. different than anything ive written before, but fun.

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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