Fear me revisited

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I hope this revision is a winner.

Fear me revisited

Murder on my mind
goose bumps up and down your spine.
Just need a target to pull the trigger
eighth sense run amuck.
Cat like reflexes stealthy exit
blink and you will surely miss me.
Don't have to stalk you, gotta have you
always know exactly where to find you.
Can't run, can't hide
I know the inner workings of your mind.
Shadowy nights, close quarters and
always on alert.
I am jealousy on fire you can't get rid of me.

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Maxsbabyforever commented on Fear me revisited

12-01-2010

Holy.... Wow.. Good job giving me goosebumps.... :)

smoothdame

12/01/2010

I wanted to give the reader something to fear. Thank you for reading and responding to my poem. Would you read my new poem "All of me" and tell me what you think of it?

arronpalmer commented on Fear me revisited

11-13-2010

Woah, this is chilling and heart-stoppingly thrilling. The way you build up the character's thoughts and anger, I feel like she is right behind me, breathing down my goose-bumped neck...

smoothdame

11/15/2010

That was what I wanted to do give the reader something to fear thanks for reading and responding to my poem.

ESSENCEOFLOVE commented on Fear me revisited

11-13-2010

This is excellent. I got chills reading it. thank you for going back and revisiting it. Great write...........E

smoothdame

11/15/2010

Thank you for reading and responding to my poem.

JadedJezzabel commented on Fear me revisited

11-12-2010

much much better girl..............best three words i've ever heard are ......edit.....flow.......edit.....you got it

smoothdame

11/12/2010

thank you i was inspired and I just went with it. thank you for reading and responding to my poem.

PoeticBrit commented on Fear me revisited

11-12-2010

i really love this one... great write:) 10 from me

smoothdame

11/12/2010

Thank you I love this one to and I am very glad I revisited this poem there was truly something more there.

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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