Army Life

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    my brother told me about bootcamp one night and i filled in the rest.

    Army Life

    Army life isn't all that fun
    The boot camp the battle RUN
    Boot camp is brutle no doubt
    Help me, help me, HELP GET ME OUT
    Run, crawl,hide
    Boot camp not a fun ride
    Cuts and bruises
    Leave no man behind no one loses
    Done with training now comes the hard
    But before we go send a card
    Fling off over the sea
    I wish I could flee
    Guns, killings, greusome site
    Hope we don't lose this fight
    The US army tough and strong
    Please let me go home before long
    Army life stinks and there's no getting out
    Help us out hear our shout
    WE DON'T LIKE IT HERE
    I just wanna go home to my dear
    Still some dead
    I got in way over my head
    Army life not that fun
    Well at least we have won

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    786mona commented on Army Life

    05-04-2010

    i love this poem, sets clear image in my mind. i like it:) good job!
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    sk8ergirl commented on Army Life

    03-23-2010

    i like the poem.........i liked it cuz it shows the things that no one realizes....sk8
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    pocketofdreams6 commented on Army Life

    03-23-2010

    This had a very traditional flow, and is far different from the type of writing I write, but I definitely did enjoy it because It did bring up good points!
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    passionsdance commented on Army Life

    03-22-2010

    Interesting. I liked the foundation of your poem but you should revise it a little. All in all you have talent and I enjoyed the read.
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    jj1562

    03/22/2010

    this was one of my poems from when i first started about 4 years ago i write some better ones now

    jesterescapade commented on Army Life

    03-22-2010

    Very strong emotional picture. It leaves a lasting impression of some one who feels misled.
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