WISHING YOU WERE HERE

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    WISHING YOU WERE HERE

    There`s a quiet place in my mind

    Wishing to find, someone kind

    In my eyes a vision of you

     And your eye captures me

    We stare, what can I say !

    Both of us without a care

    The emotion in me is like an ocean

    Softly, as love  comes, the tide pulls me

    Toward the shore, you I begin to adore

    Love shows me

    I`m not the lonely palm, Will you be long?

    My mind is filled (all day)

    With thoughts of calm, I belong !

    Rolling in the sand, take my hand

    Slowly the sun begins to set

    Are you glad we met ?

    Night has come, were still together

    Sweetest song ever

    When will you  be calling ?

                                                          By: rich Severson--09

     

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    Krystle commented on WISHING YOU WERE HERE

    02-10-2011

    This is so so very beautifully done! I love it! You detailed it in a way that makes the reader picture exaclty what you have said and it was very extrordinary! Thanks so much for sharing such a wonderful write!.
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    Olan01 commented on WISHING YOU WERE HERE

    12-28-2010

    Good poetry and use of metaphor to express you emotions. Well done. Olan.
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    Mareann commented on WISHING YOU WERE HERE

    12-26-2010

    As we long for love we keep our eyes smiling in way that says LOVE.... You captured this feeling with your words... I loved the last line, when will you be calling! Wonderful, .... Mary
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    photochick commented on WISHING YOU WERE HERE

    09-01-2009

    I enjoyed this a lot thanks for sharing it very emotional you have given the reader the ability to really feel your longing in this such emotions flow all through this brings tears to the eyes the imagery allows us to live as thought this is us great write cant wait to read more of your poetry 10 in my eyes for sure
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    rl3311 commented on WISHING YOU WERE HERE

    07-14-2009

    this is very good it brought me to tears, I know what you mean about the quiet place in your mind
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    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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