My Perfect Man

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    My Perfect Man

    Come to me my dark dark lord; bear your arms
    Of black silver light, strands of hair
    Black. Your face pale, a goatee surrounds
    Your mouth, silver dot of labret cross your
    Chin, blue eyes stare pure and innocent,
    Black clothing stands tall, silver jewelry
    Cover your hands, a cigarette dangles from
    Your soft lips, sunglasses gleam black
    Your attitude is the most unique, you care
    Not anything except my happiness and me, all
    You ask from me is respect of you and
    Loyalty is of that too, you do not pressure
    Me to do anything I do not want, unless it
    Is for my good, I have my reasons for not
    Doing some of thing I won't do, in time I
    Shall tell you, until then respect me in
    Return, our love shall be as strong
    as any other love but with power

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    poetryrules commented on My Perfect Man

    11-11-2009

    Take out the capitals at the beginnings of lines that are the middle of sentences and it will be so much easier to read. If you look at current journals, they don't use the capitals at the beginning of each lline.

    LynnHunt commented on My Perfect Man

    12-10-2008

    Wow, this was kinda choppy in your writing style but the message was conveyed. I could see him in my mind as you described him. A DARK man you seek, don't we all young one. ^VxxxxV^

    To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

    Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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