Feathers

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    Written in syllabic measure (seven syllables per line)

    Feathers


    feathers blowing in the wind

      summer skies provide the breeze

     some alone, some intertwined

    some playful as if to tease

     

    feathers dart and dance on high

    displaying vivid colors 

    painting pictures in the sky

    like wistful decorators

     

    feathers born of ancient myth

    plucked from birds that serve the gods

    some struggling as they writhe

    all with glittering facades

     

    feathers float to earth each day

    you may have seen them landing

    they beckon as on display

    with essence so commanding

     

    so if by luck you find one

    keep it well within your sight

       for on the next midnight sun

    It may once again take flight

    ©Copyright 2009 Charlie Gragg 

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    mamasan commented on Feathers

    11-23-2009

    This reminds me of a true story I read in "The Secret".. a man was testing the power of the intention and took a feather and marked it and sent it to the wind. His intention is that he would find the feather and he kept sending out his intention. He was travelling and reaching a tall building looked down and there was the same exact feather with the markings he had made thereon. And, he believe it was his angel who helped him find a job. Anyway, I have gone off the comment but Charlies I love your poetry and this one brought to mind the tale I read. Meantime, this is a ten +++
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    Hampton

    11/23/2009

    Thank you dear.

    stellar commented on Feathers

    10-28-2009

    Oh how I love to see feathers again...Spiraling towards me...This poem is so lovely
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    Hampton

    10/28/2009

    Thank you. I appreciate your comments.

    RHPeat commented on Feathers

    10-19-2009

    Hampton// Yes this is a poem written in 7 syllablc meter. Nicely done. The over use of (ing) to form the syllable count is a bit weak. But as a whole the poem has strong imagery and a powerful metaphor. Which is quite redeeming. Well written as whole with good openers, strong turning point and a grand closure. Keep up the good writing. A poet friend// RH Peat
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    Hampton

    10/19/2009

    Thank you very much. Do you really think that the use of (ing) in two lines out of twenty can be classified as overuse?

    romina983 commented on Feathers

    10-09-2009

    what a playful poem, it is so full of life and so wonderfully described!!! you are a great poet!!!amazing job!!!!
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    Hampton

    10/09/2009

    Thank you. That is very nice of you.

    Hampton

    10/09/2009

    Thank you. That is very nice of you.

    Hampton

    10/09/2009

    Thank you. That is very nice of you.

    Stryx commented on Feathers

    10-02-2009

    Nice moments of fantasy, and symbolism. I llike it. .
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    Hampton

    10/02/2009

    Thanks for reading and commenting.

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