Dream

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So this is the first piece I've written that is a song. At least to me. I have a melody for it and I"m gonna try to get a piano to play along it. What do you think, is it good or bad? I really would like some criticisms on this.

Dream

Leave you dream, baby talk to me

Wake your eyes, baby see me please

Where'd you go, come back home to me

This is all just only a dream

 

I wake only to see you asleep

Lost inside of your fantasy dream

Don't you know what your doing to me

You're leaving me all for a dream

You retreat to your wild mind

So that you can escape the pain

Don't you try to run away

Let me be right by your side

 

Leave you dream, baby talk to me

Wake your eyes, baby see me please

Where'd you go, come back home to me

This is all just only a dream

Standing still, alone in the rain

Waiting for all the pain to fade

I reach out, baby grab on me

Let me be your shining sun

 

I see you still only dream

Lost in the sea known as fantasy

But darling, its time to awake

For one cannot live in dreams

Go out and make your dreams real

I'll be there until the very end

I'll stand right there by your side

I'll share your load we both will fly

 

Come on take my hand and be free

Live your dreams, theres a world to see

Open up your heart and fly high

To the sky with me by your side

We will dream and live to see

That our dreams are reality

We will go as far as we dream

We will live, forever you and me

 

Sleep with me, baby hold on me

Dream with me, baby love with me

We'll dream of a future to see

A dream of dreams with just you and me.

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AzurePoet’s Poems (22)

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HALLOWEEN 2009 1
A MESSAGE FROM ME TO YOU 1
DREAMING 1
ON EDGE 2
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Azure Eyes 3
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Out of Reach 1
I Remember My Friend 2
My Happiest Moment 1
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LAND OF FIRE AND ICE 2
MY FATE 1
WHO:A DREAM FROM MY SLEEP 4