He Couldn't Believe What He Heard

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He Couldn't Believe What He Heard

He couldnt believe what he heard
When I spoke those seven numbers
He didnt think that I liked him
Like he like me

From that day on
We talked every night
Then one day he told me he loved me

He couldnt believe what he heard
When I spoke those three words
He didnt think that I loved him
Like he loved me

From that day on
We spent everyday and night together
Then one day he popped the question

He couldnt believe what he heard
When I told him yes
He didnt think I wanted it to be forever
Like he did

From that day on
We were inseparable
Then one day I had some news

He couldnt believe what he heard
When I told him he was going to be a dad
He didnt think I wanted a family
Like he did

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ccslim commented on He Couldn't Believe What He Heard

04-21-2011

This has pop! A nice flow and meaning! I do think that a few less words in key spots could say the same if not more than it already does and I feel like where you had separation of stanza's they could be grouped to maintain the high flow in meter. Great write!

MommyOf2Girls6

04/25/2011

Thank you! I agree with you. I remember having a little trouble writing it. It was written as a poetry challenge as well. Those can be tougher when they are telling you what to write about. :)

The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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