Portrait Of A Guiding Star

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    Portrait Of A Guiding Star

     I am the sun,
    So bright and beautiful,
    Very hot and exuberant,
    My rays are resilient,
    I bring light to the world
    A world so corrupt, yet i am brilliant.
    As the world turns and the sky stay lit,
    As the temperature rise to form heat waves
    I take upon the sky, heavenly abroad,
    To those that need me, they look up to see,
    A golden bright image, which portrays as me,
    The one self guided figure,you see before you
    Has a God-like power, which does what none other do
    Amazing as it seems, thorough but blinding to see,
    The one captivating image, so vivid, it ME...

    By Michael Smith

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    Logik commented on Portrait Of A Guiding Star

    02-05-2011

    nice flow great use of words feeling the symbolism of the sun i like this piece alot
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    JazzyBaby commented on Portrait Of A Guiding Star

    02-05-2011

    Although I know this may not have been your intention, I feel like this poem writes you off as arrogant. I think you intended to come off as a leader, or as inspiring but I think you took it too far. Otherwise, it's a great poem, and it's written beautifully. I liked that you did use yourself as a direct relation in the poem, showing that it meant something to you as more than just the author.
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    poeticmike

    02/05/2011

    I feel you Jazzy but no it was not of that nature at all. This piece is to pretty much reveal the leader & strong willed side of me but not only me, to others just like me which present that light to many others as well. That includes you too my brillliant friend..

    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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