GREEN

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    GREEN


    GREEN

     

     

    As I pick up my head from were I lye, and see world,

    Not everything is horrible,

    The mountains are green,

    And the trees are trim,

    Could it just be in my dreams?

      I lay here and treat my self to a beautiful scene,

    Were the water and sky’s are clear,

    And u can hear birds sing,

    The sun is so bright in the middle of the night,

    For which is just a dream,

    For I hear the cop’s, I just been shot,

    And I should never comeback from this beautiful dreams were

    Everything is clean.

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    Utopia666999 commented on GREEN

    05-26-2009

    The imagery and thought put into the poem touch me and I really like the movement it took, only a small side comment though is that you possibly use to many filler words like and the poem could be tightened up to make it run smoother, otherwise well done, Phe

    Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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