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    Untitled

    What a fool.
         She thought this day would be special --
                        she was meeting a lover
                                                    for the first time
              today.

    Such a fool.
         Now she stands alone in a strange motel room --
                         she said something wrong
                                                    and he walked out
              on her.

    As she stares at herself in the mirror,
                         her reflection shouts obscenities at her,
                                         making her feel like such a
              nobody.

    So she leaves the room slowly --
                         closing the door quietly,
                                          leaving a part of herself 
              behind
                                          in the wastebasket
                                with the garter belt and stockings.

    Poor little fool.

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    StandingBear commented on Untitled

    06-29-2009

    A very thought provoking work. Nicely written with great great emotions in the verses. Great write.

    castlemist commented on Untitled

    06-20-2009

    Wow, this is strong. I never really thought about this point of view and you've drawn a perfect picture. Good work!

    NenaT

    06/28/2009

    This was perhaps the most torturous piece I've written. I tried to balance her devastation and humiliation with her self-loathing without diluting any of those feelings. Your comment tells me I succeeded. Thank you.

    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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