"The one I wish was mines"
The one I wish was mines, two times I thot to myself should I move should I stay? I glanced over to where she was standing demanding that I get the chance to express how I felt as I glanced at this beautful one I wish was mines. One foot after another I look to find what could be mines, but is it time to reveal what I might steal the feel of what is on my mind. Would she believe me? Would she see me? three times I rewind to go back and act upon the true me to let her see the fire in my eye. If I loved her would she know it, I'm a poet leting his pen flow wishing this one was mine."The one I wish was mines"
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deni2u commented on "The one I wish was mines"
10-12-2009
- let me ask you mrp is she real ?and did you show her the fire and did you deliver it to her because its a good story and it is virtual in my mind thats why I ask the questions'
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poetsara113 commented on "The one I wish was mines"
09-23-2009
- very nice i liked this alot it has alot of emotion the wondering the wanting very good...............
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EricaE commented on "The one I wish was mines"
09-17-2009
- Hey this was great! I love your work, i like how you talk about go back three times, because so many are unsure about love. Good way to express feeling I can understand what you are saying.
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FreedomFromFear commented on "The one I wish was mines"
08-28-2009
- I loved it! I loved the ryhming and the emotion of it all. You have great talent! Awesome job=)
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supplyofgrace commented on "The one I wish was mines"
08-05-2009
- I like the way you are telling a story! It makes me think that I am their in your place watching it all unfold!
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