Pillow Thoughts

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  • Love
    • suzystars
    • is in love with life and all the creatures who roam the world

    Pillow Thoughts

    Laying beside you watching you sleep

    God your so beautiful and comes from deep

    I feel the love from inside your heart

    it's there for me...but where do I start

    Why me I ask, what did I do,

    Why am I so special to you?

    I lie...I cheat...I take advantage...it's true.

    You make me feel sad that

    I've treated you bad.

    I come and I go as always before

    but with you it's hard to walk out the door.

    Your love touched my heart you see and

    it's never happened before, to me.

    The pain I feel inside when I lie

    Making me crazy wanting to die

    Could this be real, am I changing my ways?

    Longing to stay the rest of my days.

    Can I fulfill what you see in me?

    Can I be totally be in love with thee?

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    JadedJezzabel commented on Pillow Thoughts

    07-18-2009

    not bad.....universal topic everyone can relate.....meter is a lil off but not much.......overall its pretty good

    Alexia commented on Pillow Thoughts

    06-15-2009

    good poem but check your grammar. Very well written and moving. I liked this piece alot. very enjoyable good job

    suzystars

    07/13/2009

    Thanks I am not a writer or a reader I was a cheerleader. They say youth was wasted on the young well I believe that to be true. I wish I had done things differently. But thank God it is never too late. I hope to improve my writing. Thanks again suzystars

    Albzzz commented on Pillow Thoughts

    04-21-2009

    Few hiccups but overall well done and great transformation throughout!

    ccslim commented on Pillow Thoughts

    04-06-2009

    Inner questioning of the heart posts well but flow a tad off. note from sleep to (then) eyes open.

    suzystars

    07/18/2009

    I see what you are saying. I fixed it. I hope!

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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