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  • Love And Death.

    Poem Commentary

    i don't want to give the impression that i am anti-romantic love. quite the contrary. even though my comparisons to romantic love of late have been dark and forboding. i am just dusting off the cobwebs and rebuilding. this poem is just a documentation of my progress and process. "Gun" was written down in two minutes but was arranged over a lifetime.

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    is love like a gun
    has it ruined warm days
    creating strangeways and newscasts

    is love warm once fired
    and do the expired lie still
    out of fear or escape

    can one survive the gun of love
    and will i ever be brave enough
    to put that barrel against my heart and head again
    will hope arrive
    like my emotion running red

    if love is like a gun
    careful where you point it
    i don't mean to sound disappointed
    but it hurts






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    Kingwebstar commented on gun

    09-04-2012

    This poem is awesome!!! Great Comparisons too.Thanks for the comment it is strange to me when people claim to read my work but never comment so I never know who they are until they comment. Thanks again .I will read lots more from you when I have the time King stays busy ruling and not just here 4 other sites too lol. Love Da KinG
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    Phission

    09/05/2012

    great lol.

    cheronld commented on gun

    08-29-2012

    This has a familiar ring to it.....the poem commentary gave me a different aspect of this write than what I felt after reading it.....I love the comparison to love and a gun....it made for a stronger impact to the words within.....and....a blend of the "Authors" insight.....great write....Cher
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    Phission

    08/30/2012

    i like this one ( is it wrong to say that about your own work in the comments ? lol ). i try to use words and items that get attention bvecause my poems are so short and the message needs to have an immediate impact.

    cheronld

    09/01/2012

    Your intent is made clear by the content despite how long or short it may be....but your potent words just give it that extra jolt for the right kind of spice....( craving my Caribbean food sorry)..lol...btw...nothing wrong with appreciating your own work at all.....be safe..Cher

    EyesOfRain commented on gun

    08-29-2012

    I LOVE THIS!!!!!! "can one survive the gun of love and will i ever be brave enough to put that barrel against my heart and head again" Absolute genius!
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    Phission

    08/29/2012

    aww, thank you, eyesO. I like to get the point across even if i have point a barrell. lol

    Iliketoflyaway commented on gun

    08-29-2012

    I like your poem. This was arranged in two minutes. you did a great job with this one.
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    Phission

    08/29/2012

    thank you, thank you, lliketo. i appreciate your time.

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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