Criticism

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getting picked on in school.

Criticism

I shy away and you laugh.
You laugh at my clothes, shoes,and body shape.
I shy away and you whisper.
You say, "there goes thunder thighs".
I shy away and wish I was popular.
I fall to the ground; you laugh.
You find every thing wrong about me.
You find nothing right about me.
All you know how to do is criticize.
You never think how I feel or what I think.
What would you do if you were me?
How would you feel if I treated you like you do me?
But that is just the facts on criticism

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karix13 commented on Criticism

12-21-2010

This poem is really good. It really shows what its like to be bullied. You describe it very well, but I might have changed a few of the phrases so it would be less redundant. Good work though!

The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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