CANT THINK

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    CANT THINK

    THE CROWD IN MY MIND
    SO SCATERED YET TOO CLOSE
    THE THOUGHTS IN MY MIND,
    CLOUDY SO I FOR GET MOST.
    I'M DYING TO SEE WHEN CLARITY COMES TO ME
    SHE'S SO PRETTY
    LIKE A CLEAR BLUE SKY-- OR BETTER YET
    LIKE A DARK BLUE SKY AGAINST THE SUNSET
    FULL MOON I TELL YA CAUSE THE FREAKS
    COME OUT.
    FUNNY HOW TIME FLIES WHEN THEY DO.
    SEE THIS JUMBLE----BINGO--DAMN WHERE'D MY MIND GO.
    SCATTERED IN THE CROWD
    I'M CLEANING UP THAT SPACE
    NO ROOM FOR DEAD WEIGHT
    TO MANY MINUS ZEROS
    HOGGING UP THAT SPACE.
    PLUS 10'S TO THE LEFT
    ALL OTHERS TO THE RIGHT
    IM CLEANING UP THIS CROWD TONIGHT

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    wheelsal commented on CANT THINK

    07-01-2009

    I actually found a poem that is decent. I agree with Congo, Correct everything and you have something.

    CongoNetherland commented on CANT THINK

    07-01-2009

    f-n cool poem. You got skills kid. I really like this poem with the rhyme and vicarious theme. WHY ARE USING CAPS?? Easy target. Don't do that. Be more conscientious. Caps are lazy. Also, just use punctuation. Why not? Spellcheck gives all of this to you, lazy. Don't make everyone else correct you. They'll read someone else, no matter how cool you are. But I dig it. Cool stuff. And fun. I can relate.

    MJJohsnon commented on CANT THINK

    05-16-2009

    refreshing. love it!

    turkeyg commented on CANT THINK

    03-25-2009

    good poem. it does feel like it's too crowded and overwhelming when you have alot on your mind. lol like this poem alot

    Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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