Untitled for now

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Untitled for now

I gave you what you wanted
Now give me what i need.
A small peace of mind
An end to the misery.
Seeing you, my heart to use to race
But now all that is there
Is a shallow space.
Filled with a hatred
That should never have formed.
Thoughts of causing you pain
Are all that make me smile.
Watching as the realization hits your eyes
That you have finally broken me.
Finally killed what was left
Of my humanity.

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Shadow2u commented on Untitled for now

02-11-2009

Good subject and some nice feeling evoked. What are the shapes, the colors, the energy, the simile and metaphor of these feelings? Such imagery would add intensity and tone.

Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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