Pain

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Written as an insight into the mind of a sexually abused child. A whirlpool of emotions and thoughts invading the no-longer-innocent mind of a child that has lived through this experience.

Pain

Crashing
      Falling
            Spinning
      Hurling
Crashing


Screaming
      Moaning
            Silentley
      Crying
Screaming


Writhing
      Moaning
            Squirming
      Crawling
Writhing


Blame
      Confusion
            Shame
      Disgust
Blame

Fear
      Loathing
            Hatered
      Mistrust
Fear

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laurilang5 commented on Pain

02-28-2010

Nice order, sorry you know how the routine goes. Your sparse illustration is so appropriate. I know your pain of naming your work, just remember you can always change it later! After all, it is yours... ;) Just think of what feeling you are trying to convey. Advice offered is only my humble opinion.

knight4696 commented on Pain

02-19-2010

EmotionalWolf ... I think you hit this one on the head .. The words alone tell the story without having to eloborate on a painful subject. I love the cadence and or form of the poem. Again though ... you gotta give these works suitable titles. Great Job! Ken

EmotionalWolf

02/20/2010

thanks soo much!!!! ya its hard to think of titles though....

Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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