"A Touch Too Much"

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All I can say is man what a day!  Needed a release, so I wrote down a piece.  Hope you enjoy.....  Have a nice day.

"A Touch Too Much"

It was already heavy
i was coping as such.
Today put it over the top
it was a touch too much!
Started with alot of blood,
moneys gone away,
A trip to the Emergency room
Doc said "right away"
Got there
from nowhere
felt as if no one cared.

Left the same
way i came.
Dizzy and weak again
In this place i've often been.

Tomorrow will be
better, we'll see
Too much to do
Too much bloody poo.

To much illness
to acheive any mobileness.
I need a break,
some help i'd gladly take.
What the hell they think
it's fake. But I'm weak,
and dizzy and still I shake.

I need to sleep
next to my  little sheep,
who keeps me strong
and tells me when something's wrong.
For him I appreciate,
but it's so late
as is my lovers touch.
lt's just been a touch too much.




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SexzAngel commented on "A Touch Too Much"

10-10-2009

so very sad and yet it grips your soul and brings tears to my eyes...yes...way to much...and time does NOT heal all wounds... it just makes you more numb until your cup over flows.....Huge hUGZ...ANGEL

lionlambluv commented on "A Touch Too Much"

09-10-2009

Pain permeates through this piece. The pain of being letdown. The pain of just too much pain! Great writing.

Tempestlady

09/27/2009

Much better since my surgery, thanks for reading.

soulwriter commented on "A Touch Too Much"

09-10-2009

Strong feelings shared, complete and honest, full of reality. I have read other pieces of your work and I admire your out pourings - your talent to make the reader feel what you are feeling. Keep creating so strongly and skillfully.

Tempestlady

09/27/2009

Sometimes, its just about me ad the therapeutic action of letting it out peacefully. But thanks for you generous comments and your time.

StandingBear commented on "A Touch Too Much"

09-03-2009

A day you had, hopefully the next ones will be better.

warsaw commented on "A Touch Too Much"

08-24-2009

I somehow feel your exhusting pain for some reason guess you really are a good writer smile thank you for sharing sincerely WARSAW

When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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FAITH 0
TWC 0
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ACCEPTANCE 0
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Say What? 0
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Flames and Tears 6
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Talk to Me 2
The Wind of Death 7
WHAT TO DO.... 3
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illusions 15
Innocent Love 17
Tranquility 15
Understanding 14
Mr. O. D. Fisher 9
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"Smokin stems on a Saturday" 5
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Love from a distance 20
Kindred Spirits 19
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