INDIGENT STATUS

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This is the first page of my short story INDIGENT STATUS.  Read and tell me what you thinking about!

INDIGENT STATUS

INDIGENT STATUS

 

 

     I made it home in time for the 5o’clock news to discover that the Judge of Superior court had committed suicide, so reported the news:

“Superior Court Judge Howell Packard died four hours after he fired a .22 caliber handgun bullet into his brain as he set at his desk in his chambers.  The amiable gray-haired 61 year old Judge was suffering from cancer of the kidneys.  the County coroner returned a formal verdict of suicide.  Packard left 3 notes attributing his act to despondency over his health.  One of the notes was to his wife, Amelia who collapsed from shock at the hospital when he died.  Investigators had not ruled out foul play.”  About 2 weeks before the mediation, Mark Deed’s cell phone had blown-up while lying on his office desk.”

At 11p.m. as Barbara Gauthier and Wayne Bennett’s broadcast was about to come on I heard a loud bang and the T.V. and lights went out.  I thought it was my conspirators closing in on me finally coming to get me because the $75,000 check would arrive in 3-5 days but it was a squirrel that had knocked the power lever loose on the transformer and Georgia Power had arrived to quickly to fix the problem.  In the dark I could see shadowy figures when loud thunderous gunshots sounded off, I was shot at close range.  The weapon believed to be used was a revolver since no empty shells were found.  From the damage to my body it is believed to be a .357 or .44.  From the way my mouth was open it is believed I was trying to say something.  One source was also said that there were 2 shooters and that 4 or 5 bullets entered my body but due to a lid of secrecy being clamped down following an autopsy there was still a lot of speculation about what happened.  There was a witness who said he saw a man run from the front of the building into the parking lot across the street.  One investigator stated, “We believe that Packard, Deeds, and Davis are somehow connected and if we find a lead in one case we will find the key to all three.

Dam! I always knew that they would kill me but I thought it would be out in the streets somewhere.  It was a 100 to one chance that I would win that case and I hit that one and with all my bodily functions cosseted, how long would it be before they found my body.  “It ain’t no sin if you crack a few laws every now and then, just as long as you don’t break any”  What is the difference between a cracking and breaking of the law?  The verb that is used.  I guess that’s how we justify the evil we do, even though there are no excuses.  Some describe my life as a movie but my life ain’t a motion picture.  Ain’t no actors, scripts, rehearsals, or 2nd takes.  When someone gets hurt, injured or killed it’s not Hollywood make-up or effects but real fights, real guns that equal out to real injuries and real death, real prison time, and real consequences that don’t have a big debut that the cast can attend.

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omari commented on INDIGENT STATUS

01-22-2010

A very compelling story..you can only wonder if this art imitating life or versa verse

nettieforce1 commented on INDIGENT STATUS

08-20-2009

now if you just want some feedback on a short story you're writing, why the need to have it rated? i find this ludicrous.

BrightStar commented on INDIGENT STATUS

07-30-2009

this is really good. I think that you should also write a poem abotu it. Did this real or not? It is really interresting.

blindmaster

07/30/2009

thank you!

Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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