Fresh Within My Mind

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Written after I found myself seeking comfort from the very arms that broke my heart

Fresh Within My Mind

Wrapped in emotion
full of fear and devotion
left with an undetermined notion
that's how you made me feel tonight

Freezing within this fire
overwhelmed with pure desire
inclined only to take this higher
yet again how you made me feel tonight

Lost deep with in those eyes
in the know but still surprised
knowing truth yet accepting lies
that's what come to mind while with you tonight

Silently watching dark reflections
everything ending with no detection
memories blurry no interconnection
again what come to mind while with you tonight

Rolling off a tongue empty speaking
meaningless words hatefully peaking
submerged in thought no more seeking
that's what your words meant to me tonight

Only wanting what can't be taken
round two of heart break already in making
no forgiveness will remove forsaking
for again that's what your words meant to me tonight

Salty tears roll down a face
at the memory of a warm embrace
that can no longer hold a place
fresh within my mind

Slowly forgetting the feel of kissing
the hurt deep down even the missing
if only able to stop reminiscing
no longer able to keep insisting
you stay fresh within my mind.

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SuSpence commented on Fresh Within My Mind

06-24-2010

This was an excellant write, you choose a traditional structure and rhyme pattern which allowed this write to flow smoothly. I could really feel the emotion in your words, the meloncholic tone with the underlying sadness. Well executed. Peace and Love, Spence

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