D011 Be first to fire

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    My middle line went 8 feet long (am I saying that right?)... I had 8 syllables. So, I had to take one out of the first or third line. It's still a Haiku (17 syllables... the Japanese put all 17 on ONE line).

    D011 Be first to fire

     

    D011 Be first to fire

     

    new scene challenge...

    note. I will adapt as always

    Live! Come thrive with me!

     

    -EinStud

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    Jacqueline51712 commented on D011 Be first to fire

    02-10-2011

    I thought Haiku has 14 lines right? Not 17 because 17th of May is my birthday...
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