An Unknown Sequence

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    What we all go throughout our daily lifes, I can simplify to this poem

    An Unknown Sequence

    The joy, the sorrow, the fear, pain, and the end
    Is what we deal with daily,no need to pretend
    Then we deal with futilism with mixed messages it sends
    Well, when will we be free from the mental prisons we attend
    With amends
    There's a chance to have more than a glance of the new
    Unlike the few stuck in the past who can't pursue
    To do what they need and want to do
    You have to stay in the, "Now",
    With ambition, keen intuition, and patience as a virtue,
    I'm very unenthused by the confused, I'm amused
    By once being abused, used, and neglected it's only the prelude
    'Til my vision's perfected,
    But from my perspective
    We're all still builing being progressive
    So as you see, in this life I live I;m very attentive
    So smart, willing, and wise are my perceptives
    To know we take way more than we give,
    While oppressive to the lies with a contraceptive
    I'm stuck in a life long paradox in an unknown sequence.

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    ApaqRasgirl commented on An Unknown Sequence

    07-23-2010

    again dear friend anther great write, when you read this; one first thinks that the author is being totally confusing with this, when in fact you make you statement so clearly in the metaphors you used. great job dear, keep em coming they just keep getting better all the time. thanks for sharing love asha

    jj1562 commented on An Unknown Sequence

    07-15-2010

    i love love your poetry it has such great rhythm to it and i totaly agree with eclipse.

    DeepEclipse commented on An Unknown Sequence

    03-01-2010

    Head up and eyes forward. Smooth lyrical delivery. Why oh why must we fight to keep just about everything. [I'm stuck in a life long paradox in an unknown sequence] - Yes indeed. To me it speaks as if in confusion but yet it knows exactly what it is.

    Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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