2 MY QUEEN

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  • Respect Urself
    • zealous123
    • Poetry tells stories n a way that i have never seen before and can open u up emotionally and speaks volumes, unheard volumes

    2 MY QUEEN

     I WANT TO ESTEEM MY QUEEN AS YOU START YOUR
    DAY BELIEVE WHEN YOU PRAY DON'T LET NO
    ONE STAND IN YOUR WAY CHASE YOUR DREAM
    FIEN LIKE IT'S ALREADY BEEN SEEN LOOK YOURSELF
    IN THE MIRROR AND SAY, I'M FINE CAUSE I'M 1 OF A
    KIND I'M WORTH MORE THAN A DIME I'M A PRECIOUS
    JEWEL WHAT YOU THINK, I'M SOME FOOL YOU CAN'T
    TREAT ME LIKE NO HO DANCING IN YOUR VIDEO WITH
    A FALSE SINCE OF A RATIO I'M MORE THAN HIPS AND
    THIGHS SEEMS LIKE THE ONLY TIME YOU COME AROUND
    WHEN NIGHT FALLS THAT'S WHEN YOU CALL TO LIE
    DOWN TO GET YOUR PIECE THEN YOU RELEASE
    LEAVING ME LIKE A FLEECE BUT UNCOVERED FELT
    SO ASHAMED SOME SAY IT'S A DIRTY GAME
    I STILL TELL MYSELF I'M TIRED OF THE SAME OL
    SAME NOBODY BUT ME TO BLAME......


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    citimagnolia commented on 2 MY QUEEN

    09-20-2009

    I think we've all (men and women) at some point ignored our self worth, for the sake of attention, fulfillment and yes LOVE....we crave it, but desparation can be lethal.
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    zealous123

    09/21/2009

    thanx for the love really

    Sydney commented on 2 MY QUEEN

    09-06-2009

    i agree with cmlestrade here. but keep on writing on how you feel. im not confused on how you wrote it or anything. but someone who would read after me and might've read before me (not saying everyone but just those) might not understand what youre talking about because your sentences leap onto the next. its most punctuation. but other than that, i wouldnt change a thing.
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    zealous123

    09/06/2009

    thanx for honesty really, workn on structure.

    lunamarie commented on 2 MY QUEEN

    09-06-2009

    I'm dancin' and groovin' Z .................. Luna
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    zealous123

    09/06/2009

    thanx for ur comment really

    Vonn commented on 2 MY QUEEN

    09-04-2009

    wow this hit home. bein a young girl i haven't experienced so much but to jus get a glimpse of this from a male is shockin and inspiring. i love it a perfect 10. keep doin your do
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    zealous123

    09/05/2009

    THANX REALLY FOR UR FEED BACK, I JUS B REAL WHEN I RITE, MORE TO COME CHECK BAK...

    sincere commented on 2 MY QUEEN

    08-27-2009

    Being a woman this poem immediately hit home. I use to feel that way alot when I was exploring my sexuality and looking for love. Its funny how you being a man understands how a woman feels. This was very good but I suggest writing it in a format so it will be easier to read and follow.
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    zealous123

    08/27/2009

    yes i need to improve on formatting, never been a poet bfore, thanks for feed back really, i been through alot so thats why i understand women, eplored myself..thanx

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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