Tomorow is never promcied

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Tomorow is never promcied

      He has every reason to throw his fist in the face of his god,
                           To let his mother die.
                   Why did the innocent pass away?
            Why couldn't we all just stay together forever?


                Now my heart is buried under that tomb stone.
                       We could all be missing any moment.
                            Tomorows never promcied.

              I'll see you on the other side, the wait has no time.
     Wish that fortune teller could had told me this was going to happen.
            Only God knew, well writen before feet steped on earth.
                         If he only could have said good bye.

                  Dry your eyes, she dances in the sunlight.
                              She's among angels now!
               She deserves a brake as she sleeps on clouds.
                           You came and went so fast.

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BikemanRJ commented on Tomorow is never promcied

03-21-2010

I like the phrase "well written before feet stepped of earth" in your poem show just how mighty and powerful God is. A very sad poem that expresses the loss of a mother. But her being among the angels on the other side is victory indeed. Great Poem God Bless BikemanRJ

SuperChick76 commented on Tomorow is never promcied

01-27-2010

Beautifully written. One line has 2 errors, though "Tomorows never promcied" Tomorrow's and Promised, I believe you were trying to say. Other than that, it was was very nicely written. Good job, I enjoyed it. :)

dumplin commented on Tomorow is never promcied

01-27-2010

This is so sad! I feel the pain in this piece. I would like to suggest that you use the spell checker and watch your grammar as well. There are several errors. However, it is a very heartfelt piece.

Mandi commented on Tomorow is never promcied

01-27-2010

This is a very sad poem. I like the imagery. You have created some new pphrases that are quite good. YOu need to have someone edit the grammar, punctuation, spelling, and english, however. It detracts from the quality of your creative word phrases. Let someone help you . Do a rough draft then, message it to me or someone you.trust. Otherwise, a very nice poem goes completely unappreciated.

Musicmynded1 commented on Tomorow is never promcied

01-27-2010

From one song writer to another,,,,, this SUCKS!!!!!!!!! I am sooooo kidding you,,, lol,, this is really good penning of a song. Wish i wrote it, keep on writing and playing. and find that "Just the right path" for it all. Eddie V.

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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