Souls Torn Apart

2 Comments

Tags:
  • Obsticles
    • ,
  • Love
    • ,
  • Family
    • ,
  • Life

    Poem Commentary

    I personally like it. All commentary is fine by me. Unless it's idiotic.

    Souls Torn Apart


    Life separated us, a force beyond our control.
     

    I see your pictures, i see your likes, i see the friends that are part of your life.
     

    Life tore us apart, everyday, every night constantly under it's watchful patrol.
     

    I see you and cry and hope for someday to be by your side.


    Life came between us, linked by the same blood of two lost souls,
     

    I see you and see a stranger, someone i love yet tends to hide.
     

    It's not your fault, nor am i to blame, it's the sacrifice made by the blade.

    Poem Comments

    (2)

    Please login or register

    You must be logged in or register a new account in order to
    leave comments/feedback and rate this poem.

    Login or Register

    TinaStevens commented on Souls Torn Apart

    01-02-2011

    i like how this seems to be something everyone can relate to.... its really good
    Reply to Comment

    imalwasymused

    01/02/2011

    thank you soo much! I love your stuff and it really means a lot

    sharenhansen commented on Souls Torn Apart

    12-31-2010

    will read more this is great it seemed sad spacing adds emphasis
    Reply to Comment

    imalwasymused

    01/01/2011

    thank you sooo much!!! it's my first one and i was nervous :D

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

    Unknown Source

    imalwasymused’s Poems (5)

    Title Comments Submitted
    Title Comments Submitted
    Que Triste 0 12/16/2011
    Man's Best Friend 1 01/04/2011
    The Ultimate Test 2 01/01/2011
    Open 1 01/01/2011
    Souls Torn Apart 2 12/31/2010
    Top of Page