Sex On Cloud Nine

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  • Sex

    Poem Commentary

    I wrote this poem because I wanted to try a new approach to poetry.  I originally wrote it on December 12, 2008.  But I edited it shortly after that.  I decided to enter it in a contest because it shows a new me.

    Sex On Cloud Nine

    Im on cloud nine.
    This feeling feels so good.
    As my body tingles, the sensations take over.
    I shake, I quiver, I jerk.
    The moans escape my body.
    I hold it as my temperature rises.
    The heat is too much, I can't take much more.
    My back arches and I can't hold on.
    My pussy is on fire.
    He licks and nibbles, holding my legs in place.
    He tongues my clit, then lightly blows.
    I cum so fast and hard.
    I try to push his head away, but he doesn't budge.
    He tells me he wants more.
    He tells me to take it and love it.
    My moans are now screams.
    I scream his name as I climax.
    It lasts for five minutes.
    My body shoots out an undrinkable liquid.
    But he licks it all not missing one drop.
    He releases my legs and tongues my double d's.
    Taking each nipple into his mouth and gently biting them.
    They immediately harden loving the attention.
    He palms my breast, as he rams deep into my pussy.
    I cry out as his strokes become harder harder and he goes deeper and deeper into my womb.
    The sound it makes is beautiful.
    His dick finds a rhythm of its own.
    As he rams in and out of my now soaked pussy, I cant help but scream.
    I hold the bars of the headboard tight.
    He's now lost all control.
    Loving me on cloud nine.

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    Wonxxtnz commented on Sex On Cloud Nine

    06-18-2009

    eeeeewww wee man... im all flustered & blushin..its erotic alright...but could u perform it @ a poetry reading..that would be somethin...i'll give it a capital E for effort not yours but his since his lip service was the basis of your motivation...& you get a 9.5 for being so moist.....

    Xperience1 commented on Sex On Cloud Nine

    06-18-2009

    I am loving it. A little bit more on the imaginary scene, but other than that, it was well written. Keep it up!!!

    Banetat06

    06/19/2009

    Thanks so much for the comment...I dont think I could open up anymore than that...Im a little shy when it comes to writing stuff like this.

    Darkblade commented on Sex On Cloud Nine

    06-17-2009

    It boarder's On erotica, But good word useage & imagery but there be something missing maybe a more intense climax!

    FLAWLES commented on Sex On Cloud Nine

    06-16-2009

    Lovin' of cloud nine. Damn! I wish it were mine. Oh well, you're too far away; but that don't mean, I can't hope and pray.

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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