"4 Seasons Change"

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    "4 Seasons Change"

    A new beginning, a brand new start
    An easy way out, to ease your heart
    Step by step, you walk away
    The skies are clear, "it's no longer gray"
    The shaded area is the part you don't see
    I'm stuck in the middle, this empty home, just me
    Alone in the dark, I think of you
    And how I felt, "now i'm singing the blues"
    Knowing the fact, that you're no longer with me
    I'm sitting here alone, just waiting to see
    If leaving me was the best thing you have done
    I wish you the best, in this life you have won
    To conquer your fate, and to face your fears
    This chapter is over, part "2" next year
    Fresh air, new smell, it's greener on the side
    You attempted fate, and lost your pride
    The experience you gave was a lifetime to me
    I'm expressing my feelings, one day you'll see
    How it feels to be on my side
    When it hurts so bad, "you can't even hide"
    The expression on your face, "when friends are around"
    That's how I felt when you left town
    Leaving me without a trace
    I know that one day I'll see your face
    Just pass by and don't say hi
    The memories still there, " I just want to cry"
    Seeing you and your beautiful face
    It's hard for me, "to forget and erase"
    The life we had, "the two of us together"
    We survived the haid, and the stormy weather
    It's just another ride, "that i'm willing to take"
    Just promise me, make no more mistake
    But if you do, I'm here for you
    We'll talk it over and see things through
    Bright and clear you are "mine" again
    I'm glad our history has a happy end

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    Benjamin commented on "4 Seasons Change"

    02-19-2009

    Hey man I really liked this poem. I only had a few things to nitpick. In one line you say "You attempted fate" and I was wondering how one goes about doing that? Alsofurther down you say "We survived the haid," what's haid? Last but not least, two lines down from that I was thinking that instead of "make no more mistake" you might want to make an exception to you rhyme scheme and just write "mistakes." Anyways I hope I've been a little bit helpfull, goodluck!

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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