Listen Up!

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Listen Up!

I told you you broke my heart
   - there was no regret.
 
I told you we needed counseling
   - you didn't make a phone call.
 
I told you I didn't know how to move on
   - you made no effort to restore trust.
 
I told you you needed help
   - you never dialed 911
 
I told you if you didn't get help I was leaving.....................
 
I told you,
   "Goodbye!"

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jam4muzic commented on Listen Up!

08-05-2009

Uh..well. For starters, you sound very hurt about whatever happened and you felt that you had to resort to writing it out. It was okay, I'll admit. the title doesn't feel like it suits the poem. The way your wrote it doesn't feel right. But, it's just my opinion...

Sassafras1

08/05/2009

Just curious - what would you have titled the poem?

Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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