Beware

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    A poem written for my first true love that scared me so deep it left me torn to the very depths of my soul...

    Beware

    In the midst of the summer's eve,
    Lies blackened cold heart of stone,
    Torn and be withered,
    Scarred and shattered,
    Into a savage quest of faith.

    The savage heart reeks of fury,
    Vengeance towards the pressor of weaponry emotions,
    Scarred deep into the heart of the soul.

    The horrid cries disappear into the blackened chilled night,
    But nobody hears the whisper.

    The be withered heart freezes in the intensity of the pearl white moon,
    Yet nobody sees the sight,
    Nobody hears the cry.

    Long into the ever cold darkened blue sky lighted night,
    Lies the dreaded memory of lost love.

    Can the longing adolescent heart be forgot,
    Can the barbaric soul be saved.

    Forgetting is a task for a thousand soldiers to challenge in bloody defeat,
    But remembering is calling the Devil himself to your door,
    Beware of the deadly cry,
    Beware of the longing memory...

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    Forgetting is hard to do,
    But remembering can be deadly!!!

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    Rhymer commented on Beware

    10-24-2010

    Loved the last line, forgetting is hard to do, but remembering can be deadly. You were very talented even at seventeen.
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    knight4696 commented on Beware

    08-30-2010

    Angel ... This is an awesome debut poem my friend! There is nothing like a lost love. The pain can linger on forever if you let it. Forgetting is hard to do .. but as you said remembering can be deadly. Great Job! :) Ken
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    angel33614

    08/30/2010

    This is one of my old ones as well, wrote it when I was 17 I think. After my highschool sweet heart broke my heart into more pieces than I could glue back together. I was alittle emotional when i wrote this one, lol. I still use that line as I have found much wisdom in it. Purity of the soul, journey well!!! with grace and humility ANGEL

    Charlie23 commented on Beware

    07-27-2010

    Wow! Your poetry is very intense, angel! You are so very talented!
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    angel33614

    07/29/2010

    Thank you so much for such kind words coming from such a great poet, you got this poem right on. it was written with alot of intensity and built up anger. This has always been one of my favs, thanks for reading! Purity of the soul, journey well!!! Angel

    Azzrella commented on Beware

    06-17-2010

    DID YOU WRITE THIS ABOUT ME? IT'S LIKE YOU'RE IN MY HEAD FEELING MY FEELINGS AND THOUGHTS!!! YOU ARE MY TWIN!
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    angel33614

    06/17/2010

    No this is a very old poem I wrote about my first love, she tore my heart beating from my chest and part of me never recovered. it is a memory that till this day haunts my nightmares... I am glad you were able to relate to the poem on such a personal level. This is one of my fav poems. Thanks again for reading! Purity of the soul, journey well!!! Your friend Angel

    SavVySam commented on Beware

    05-09-2010

    The ominousness overtones, and outright warnings are emblazoned within this cautionary piece. "remembering is calling the Devil himself to your door," Forgetting circumstances or events that will in part contribute to shaping who you will ultimately become, seems on the whole impossible. Maybe these scars are acquired to provide insights or as a map for you to guide others by...A very strong write!
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    angel33614

    05/12/2010

    Thankyou so much for the kind and thoughtful review, even in your reviews your wording is poetic, lol. That quote is one of my favs, atleast that I wrote. Very true statement, The pain and scars of our past id very much apart of who we are. I had to learn that one the hardway as I seem to learn most lessons in life. Thanks again! Purity of the soul, journey well!!! Angel

    Poetry is what is lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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