An Atom to a Star

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    An Atom to a Star

    What place have I

    in this envelope of time?

    I stand upon the shores of eternity

    in awe of the universal mind.


    Its creation before me…

    deep beyond measure.

    As an atom to a star…

    I am one with the cosmos.


    Like shattered, splintering light

    my spirit shines forth and

    echoes endlessly across the universe


    I am one with time…

    consumed by its expanse…

    a ripple upon a sea of immensity.

     

     

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    geminiSoFYE commented on An Atom to a Star

    06-05-2009

    this makes me think of myself and how i percieve life sometimes when im in bed and its dark and i look out amongst me its like i can see life as particles like whwn you see a tv screen all staticy i sometimes wonder if its just me or if its God reminding me of how connected i am to the rest of the universe like a piece to a puzzle... i love this poem you wrote it for me & didnt even know it til now.. God knew it thoughLOL!!!
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    dewachen commented on An Atom to a Star

    06-05-2009

    Wow, I think you have great capacity for poetry, I would say you have lived and contemplated these things before or you would not have the propensity to look outside the box. Very well written and keep up the good work.
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    Writer1 commented on An Atom to a Star

    06-03-2009

    This is what I love about poetry. There are SO many ways to write poetry and because of that, I get to see how others do it. Hope you understand if I say you write like an "old soul." It's a compliment! :)
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    Cosmos

    06/03/2009

    Thank you very much for your comment. It means a lot, and I appreciate the "old soul" compliment. I look forward to reading your stuff.

    thoughtsaflame commented on An Atom to a Star

    06-03-2009

    I enjoy how your incorporate your love for space into your writing. What a wonderful way of using imagery. Your rhythm is very nice. I love the last line...it seems to tie a nice bow in the entire presentation of your piece. Another nice write. :o) Bj
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    Cosmos

    06/03/2009

    Thank you so for your comment. This was a difficult one to try and write..., because the subject is hard to put into words. My fear about this one is that people would find it to be incoherent. Im glad that you were able to follow it and appreciate the meaning behind it. Thanks =)

    jademelissa74 commented on An Atom to a Star

    06-03-2009

    Well written poem! I like the imagery portrayed. "A ripple upon a sea of immensity" reflects the imagination of the poet :)) Great Job!!
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    Cosmos

    06/03/2009

    Thank you for your feedback. "A ripple upon a sea of immensity" is truly how I feel about life whenever I look at the Big Picture. Im glad that you enjoyed it. Thanks =)

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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