Alone

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    Alone

    I HAVE MANY AROUND ME WHO SAY THEY LOVE & CARE

    BUT TRULY I'M ALONE

    I COULD HAVE THE WORLD AT MY SIDE

    AND STILL BE ALL ALONE

    TO BE TRULY ALONE HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH THE PEOPLE WHO SURROUND ME

    BEING ALONE IS SOMETHING DEEP INSIDE

    SOMETHING UNCONTROLLABLE SOMETHING THOSE AROUND ME WOULD NEVER UNDERSTAND

    THE BURNING, TEARING, EMPTY SENSATION DEEP INSIDE MY CHEST WHERE MY HEART ONCE BEAT

    IN THE MIRROR ALL I SEE IS A BLURRY, BLOODY IMAGE

    ALL THE PAIN AND ALL THE FEAR COMES RUSHING IN WITH A SINGLE FLOWING TEAR

    TO END THIS ALL I MUST SAY FOREVER MORE GOODNIGHT.

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    Karma885 commented on Alone

    04-19-2009

    I KNO HOW YOU FEELING HUN I BIN THER SOOO MANY TIMES. EVEN PEOPLE AROUND ME FOR SOME REASON I STILL FEEL INCOMPLEAT. AND STILL FEEL ALONE. CAN YOU COMMENT ON MY POEMS

    mmichelle97219 commented on Alone

    02-13-2009

    The But at the beginning of the second line diminishes the impact of that line. Just throw that word away and make a solid statement. The other suggestion I would make is to not use all uppercase when typing. You are not screaming or yelling at anyone. There are times when that work well, but not here. Other than that I thought this was a very good poem. Happy Writing Michelle

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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