STUMP

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    STUMP

    I look at the stump and wonder
    Was there or is the life yonder
    It was there as a base
    And no, there was no haste
    Slowly and slowly it withered
    Became a vegetable, never imagined
    Hope was, but, a distant dream
    Tears, Oh now and then, used to gleam
    Then came the time of judgement
    The stump was but the remnant
    Winds that blew away the shriveled foliage
    Had been vehement, so full of rage
    Now all over there was calm
    Applying balm, no the rage was not a sham
    Stump stumbled back to life
    Will it or wont it, everywhere was the rife
    A new sapling was grown
    To many it seemed was its own
    Now it’s giving shade no wonder
    Was there or is the life yonder

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    abhash0 commented on STUMP

    05-11-2009

    A good poem.

    Prritiy

    06/01/2009

    Thanks, am encouraged

    Prritiy

    06/01/2009

    Thanks, am encouraged

    RHPeat commented on STUMP

    04-27-2009

    Prritiy: a couple of suggestions try to learn to write through your rhymes a bit more. And as far as the conceit is concerned:(an extended metaphor) it would have been stronger if it had more of the information connected to a cut tree. I liked the use of the shade, this was in keeping with the tree image. I just think you could have played up more and revealed the leg loss at the turning in the poem. Another thing that improve your music would be to start counting syllables in each line. Syllabi

    MLong commented on STUMP

    04-22-2009

    "Hope was, but, a distant dream" have felt that way many times.loved it.

    Janu commented on STUMP

    04-11-2009

    good one

    Poetry is what is lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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