Pretty & Perfect Makes me Pretty Nervous

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  • pocketofdreams6
  • If I speak in the tongues of men and angels, but have not love, I have become sounding brass or a tinkling symbol. And if I have prophecy and know all mysteries and all knowledge, and if I have all faith so as to remove mountains, but have not love, I am nothing. And if I dole out all my goods, and if I deliver my body that I may boast but have not love, nothing I am profited. Love is long suffering, love is kind, it is not jealous, love does not boast, it is not inflated. It is not discourt

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This is an older poem I wrote from about 5 years ago, although I decided to throw some better words and make it more of a final copy.  Hope you enjoy!

Pretty & Perfect Makes me Pretty Nervous

Yes your young and pretty, but mindless in the mirrors, your cries are interferred by stainless steel tears, you remain disguised behind a frame, a frequent number to your name, a cubicle in construction, I place blame on the deception of agenda you claim.

Shall I elaborate the crisis, Oh Christ must I say this, the zest you dislocated from my chest, what debrit you left, forthwirth my veins abscond, as you seem to loom here and there

I am the fish caught in your fish net stalkings, in an eyelet blinded from the sunshine, the leaves will lapse and I will imagine the colors on these black and white walls

One impure snowflake will grace my tongue, pneumonia has been planted within my less left lung, lost between the seasons I write these exaggerations during the spring time

I am the slave making minimum wage, lashes blistered deep amongst my back, the matches I lack to light the candle for your never ending rave.

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soulwriter commented on Pretty & Perfect Makes me Pretty Nervous

07-14-2009

I like your powerful prose - there is a steeliness, leaving acid taste upon the readers tongue, wanting to be cleansed and also wanting more. This an allegory that is open for many interpretations. I would enjoy knowing your inspiration and feelings directed to the disposition of the composition. Write on Write ON!

pocketofdreams6

07/14/2009

I actually wrote this about this girl I used to be obsessed with online like 6 years ago after she completely began ignoring me for no reason, and acting stuck up... haha... But since I wrote it, and I have grown as a writer I made slight improvisions.

AmadeusEx commented on Pretty & Perfect Makes me Pretty Nervous

07-13-2009

so fucking cool, the lyrical and disturbing images you come up with give me chills sometimes, awesome job, one of my favorites of yours

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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