pain from your tears

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    pain from your tears

    whem you put your head on my shoulder and cry your tears hit me like a bullet that can't be remove,and your soul cry out to me for help,i try not to hear it but i just can shout it out.As the tears on your face run down like a river,i hold your hand and tell you everything going to be ok,that all the pain going to go away but i lair,i lair so i can't hear your pain nomore,i cry at night hopeing i can take your pain away for you,trying to found away to make you smile again.your smile brighting my day but your pain kills me everyday.So i tell you how i realy feel,your tears hit me like a bullet a bullet that can never be remove,so your pain is my pain,your tears is my tears,together we can find away to make it all go away.i love you and your pain
    by:de brown

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    cmlestrade commented on pain from your tears

    07-11-2009

    Great emotions in this poem but a lot of problems with spelling ,punctuation and changes in verb tense it detracts from the overall piece. nevertheless your emotion does come forth.

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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