Not Just Civil

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  • Loss
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  • Death
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  • Life
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  • Emotional
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  • Family

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    This poem is also posted on wattpad, under the same title, and my account name is the same. Just dont want any copyright issues. I posted it here as well because i wanted a wide array of feedback, and poetry isnt popular on wattpad

    Not Just Civil

     Picture this scene; naught but blood
    and weeping ones loved, crouched over their dead
    whispered cries, 'Lord, Forgive me' as they end their sorrow
    This wasn't what He intended, not death by a brother's hand
    We think its over; the red days gone
    but it is anything but
    we fail to see past the stain
    civil isn't all that exists
    Our family isn't the whole; just a drop in our veins
    our brothers are across their seas, beyond our gruesome walls
    they spilled our life with envy
    but shall we spill theirs? no.
    why would we?
    What shall our excuse be?
    When we are no longer hidden by our lies,
    as the light from their tears shine through
    we are ourselves
    evil, not civil

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    sevyn7 commented on Not Just Civil

    02-25-2011

    Wow, this is an ambitous poem, coming from one who is thirteen years of age. This poem is great on many levels, and I look forward to more of you work. Amazing write, Sev'n
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    Musicmynded1 commented on Not Just Civil

    02-25-2011

    i mostly like how youve wrote this out.. style wise.
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    winterkou commented on Not Just Civil

    02-25-2011

    to only be 13 you got saw talent , I enjoyed this write, a beautiful tribute to all those who have given their lives. a def. two thumbs up in my eyes.
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    Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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