My thoughts strike my temple...

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My thoughts strike my temple...

I take a peak
what goes there?
a rainbows retreat...
Such a feat of excellence in mist of the sky's leak.

I catch a thrill
From what you ask?
red, orange, and teal
The imagery I feel, strikes the moments I kill.

I watched the rain
why does it fall?
God's crying for our shame
The gesture, the earth seeks, simple an plain.

I love to write
why can't I stop?
the phrases ignite
Metaphors and similes that blend in my mind.

I touched my heart
how did it feel?
full from every arch
The course of blood striking it, values my parts.

I dreamt a dream
what did it mean?
a nightmare in many scenes
I lust at the falling rain, and rainbows, my heart esteems.

I breathe the air
why should I?
a meaningless affair
From my window I shed a tear that mocks altair.

So brilliant the bright sight in my company here
I feel, dream, ignite
as I write without care
So the reasons for this poem is not from my stare
but my dreams, as my heart beats, while breathing the air.

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Altair commented on My thoughts strike my temple...

04-24-2010

Wow, perhaps this was some sort of fating reality, for you to mention the star altair, made me smile, for you wrote this over two months ago, damn dream, you are a force, the style of this is different and very concise... I wish you had more writes than just three. Op is lucky to have you

dreamscape

04/24/2010

ha ha ha!! I completely forgot that I mention the star in this poem, i guess it was favored so for you to read it and enjoy it the same.. thank you dear xoxo

jademelissa74 commented on My thoughts strike my temple...

03-22-2010

Another well-written poem. The rhyming flow was liquid-like and the imagery was vivid. "So the reasons for this poem is not from my stare but my dreams, as my heart beats, while breathing the air" ....The ending was profound and on point. Great job. Thank you for sharing your mind!

dreamscape

04/23/2010

Yes I had fun writing this one, perhaps one of my simplest yet best..thank you jade

MalikPeterson commented on My thoughts strike my temple...

03-18-2010

this piece here is really good. I LOVE the flow of it...flows off the tongue so easily. The imagery here is very colorful and it provides animation as the words dance to your rhythm. May the Kudos be with you :)

dreamscape

03/18/2010

thank you malik =)

MalikPeterson

03/18/2010

you are very welcome :)

UnoMono commented on My thoughts strike my temple...

03-01-2010

You combine every aspact of this poem into a sophisticated and captivating plot... You are truly creative....

TCpoeboy commented on My thoughts strike my temple...

02-27-2010

very fluent with your write and the intensity of your energy in your words! great write!

When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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