Blank Faces

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    Blank Faces

    Come walk my path with me.

    Come and walk the step I took to make some my dreams come true.

    Look out my eyes and see the soul I ran into. And see the promise I told them as well listen to the one they made to me.

    Look out my eyes and see the life I have touch along the way to reach my goal.

    See those whom have lie to me and those whom have keep there words to me and my heart.

    Come and walk with me and understand why these soul has came into my life and done me the way they feel they have to do to reach there goal.

    Come and see whom these face are that show me there light and there dark soul.

    Well you look out my eyes and see who they are and where there are now in my life.

    Well?!

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    cmlestrade commented on Blank Faces

    07-27-2009

    A very good effort. Intense theme. The main problem seems to be frequent changes in verb tense. and spelling i.e...There vs their. This was a good effort. keep writing

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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